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Caught in a lie and a broken promise,
he understood that he had to pay.
To be forever caged in a foreign form,
cold, hard and unyielding,
was the agreed upon punishment.
He resigned him self to that fate.
But did the witch have to give him
a yellow handle thus always
identifying his cowardice?
Write a story in exactly 55 words.
Judy (I would link to you but the one in the comment is not working) got all of yesterday's questions correct with the following exceptions:
#5 was the half - those are things I collect but most can often be found on my desk at different times.
#10 - These are nicknames I had as a child.
#5 was the half - those are things I collect but most can often be found on my desk at different times.
#10 - These are nicknames I had as a child.
Interesting concept to ponder: hell or prison, the punishment is being stuck with others just like you.
ReplyDeleteHell hath no furry as a witch scorned :) Excellent 55 Happy Friday :)
ReplyDeletei like the color yellow...its the flopping wheel or the sticking wheel i would worry about...dont most of those carts have one...nice 55.
ReplyDeleteI like that one. clever.
ReplyDeleteLove it...clever, original.
ReplyDeleteClever take on being behind bars...
ReplyDeleteTom & Icy: What a horrible fate that would be. I’d hate to spend eternity with people like me.
ReplyDeleteThom: That’s right. Watch your step, mister.
Brian Miller: There’s nothing worse than a bum wheel.
anthonynorth: Shopping carts are people too.
5thsister: I was bored waiting for my hubby to bring me alcohol.
Jinksy: Sitting doing nothing is like a prison to me some times.
Broken promise and a lie? Oh that needs a punishment, definitely..Awesome 55, Nessa!
ReplyDeleteWonderful writing..as always! Have a sparkling wkd Nessa!
ReplyDeleteOnly One person
ReplyDeleteThinks of Morphing Shopping Carts
Vanessa Kilmer
Deliciously Different 55 My Dear.
You Rock!
Have a Kick Ass Week-End...G
Very Karmic....Here's my Friday 55. Hope your week goes well
ReplyDeleteDont mess with mama!
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Mumsy: One or the other, you might give a second chance, but not both together.
ReplyDeleteKiki: My daughter is bring me green quartz from the Outer banks so I think I will.
G-Man: Different has always been the polite word for what happens in my mind, but you made it special by adding the delicious part.
John's comments: Karma is my friend.
Noe Noe Girl...A Queen of all Trades.: She will always get you in the end.
Sounds like "The Scarlet Letter" all over again - too many people are still comfortable (even these days) labeling people.
ReplyDeleteA thought-provoking 55, Vanessa!
Have a great weekend!
Reminds me of something that would happen on Twilight Zone. I think I will name my cart next time I go shopping. You never know who has een cast into a shopping cart.
ReplyDeleteGreat read.
Not "My Mother the Car", but My Coward the Shopping Cart". Loved it. So creative.
ReplyDeleteamazing 55.
ReplyDeletewell played!
That was one wicked witch, who lived up to her true color ;)
ReplyDeleteGreat 55... but then, they always are!
ReplyDeleteTsk. I wouldn't even notice the yellow handle if you didn't point it out.
ReplyDeleteThe shopping carts are in a cage because homeless people take them and put all their belongings in them?
ReplyDeleteEric Alder: I believe in judgment and condemnation and everyone should know about it. ;)
ReplyDeleteFinding Pam: I never thought of that. I liked that show. It was weird and spooky.
Monkey Man: Good name. Do you think I should do a Script submission? Nostalgia with a twist?
Jingle: Thanks.
Mona: She doesn’t like to be messed with, that’s for sure.
Together We Save: Thank-you very much.
Alice Audrey: See how helpful i am to you. I live to serve.
Karen a.: Actually what is happening is that the homeless people are taking the shopping carts out for they daily exercise routine.
Thank you Nessa. I can visualize that now. Do any of the homeless people have yellow hair?
ReplyDeleteI would not want a fate of the shopping cart - germy little buggers too.
ReplyDeleteCowardice always shows. No matter what the witch had turned him into, some part of him would have been yellow.
ReplyDeleteVery nicely written Nessa. Have a great weekend.
ReplyDeleteMy 55 is here.
This felt like an experience I went through earlier this year. This is an incredible piece.
ReplyDeletekaren a.: Yellow and purple, green and red, blue and orange – they are a happy people.
ReplyDeleteSue: The germs are like pilot fish are to sharks.
quilly: The marking part was the most important part of the spell.
KB: Thanks. I hope your weekend will be great, too.
SandyCarlson: I hope you are not still a shopping cart. Oops. I suspect that’s not the part you meant. ;)
Awww. That would be a dreadful punishment indeed.
ReplyDeleteAwww. That would be a dreadful punishment indeed.
ReplyDeletesecret agent woman: But well deserved in this case.
ReplyDeleteGreat 55!
ReplyDeleteHave a great Sunday!
Eden: I hope your Sunday is fantastic.
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