Friday, June 25, 2010

Flash 55 – stream of consciousness

could I be any further behind
the eight ball
in the side pocket
full of posies
ashes, ashes,
dust to dust
bunnies under the bed
what are you so afraid of
your own shadow
dancing , baby you do it right
the first time ever
i saw your face
the music of the heart
beat
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Write a story in exactly 55 words.
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  1. UnknownFri Jun 25, 07:10:00 AM EDT

    Ah, clever one you are!

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  2. AnonymousFri Jun 25, 07:44:00 AM EDT

    Well I had my boogie shoes on reading this. Well done and very clever :)

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  3. John (@bookdreamer)Fri Jun 25, 08:08:00 AM EDT

    It were the cheese, weren't' it me dear. Mine is mere demonic temptation in this week's 55!

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  4. Finding PamFri Jun 25, 09:00:00 AM EDT

    What a great short 55. Loved it.

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  5. JeanieFri Jun 25, 10:01:00 AM EDT

    A lot behind each phrase of this 55words. Very good.

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  6. Noe Noe Girl...A Queen of all Trades.Fri Jun 25, 12:19:00 PM EDT

    Awesome 55 and happy Friday Nessa!
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  7. JimFri Jun 25, 06:19:00 PM EDT

    This is good, Nessa. So good too that it is all printable.

    So did that heart beat go 'pitty pat, pitty pat,' or 'thumpity thump thump.' Or was is like a frightened heart about to have a heart attack?
    ..
    BTW, you should feel honored being that you are getting my first note written from London in a long time!
    ..

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  8. tattytiaraFri Jun 25, 09:30:00 PM EDT

    Feels good just to let the mind unravel occasionally.

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  9. quillyFri Jun 25, 11:20:00 PM EDT

    This so fits my day today. Thank you for writing it for me.

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  10. Ronda LaveenSat Jun 26, 12:33:00 AM EDT

    I haven't heard or thought of the song, First time ever I saw your face, for a long time.

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  11. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallSat Jun 26, 06:58:00 AM EDT

    smart and lovely 55.

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  12. colleenSat Jun 26, 07:54:00 AM EDT

    Jive talking, packs a punch.

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  13. Maude LynnSat Jun 26, 08:48:00 PM EDT

    This is really cool, Nessa!

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  14. secret agent womanSat Jun 26, 11:05:00 PM EDT

    Fun. It almost started me singing.

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  15. RAMon Jun 28, 07:02:00 AM EDT

    I'm so behind, but your post got me into an energetic mood. Great!

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  16. UnknownMon Jun 28, 08:22:00 PM EDT

    You are so creative. I can't take it : )

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  17. SandyCarlsonThu Jul 01, 09:20:00 PM EDT

    I feel--have felt--this one. Thanks for putting these words down.

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