Friday, March 19, 2010

Flash 55 – Help?

flash 55
Write a story in exactly 55 words.
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03A disaster lay before him. Cars came from every direction, all on the verge of crashing into one another. He could see it all before it happened. Bodies laying on the ground, limbs broken, blood coloring metal and glass and tarmac.
But should he dial the emergency number? Would it be the help he sought? 
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43 comments:

  1. Dreams of PerfectionFri Mar 19, 02:15:00 AM EDT

    This story is interesting! The crashed could've happened for so many reasons. Was he drunk? On drugs? Speeding? & so forth!

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  2. quillyFri Mar 19, 03:32:00 AM EDT

    Was this a psychic trying to stop the crash? That's always a dilemma because any action one takes to stop a premonition may instead be the trigger ...

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  3. AnonymousFri Mar 19, 04:27:00 AM EDT

    Hmmm depends. Does he/she have powers to see it before it happens? I just don't think it's right to change what is suppose to be. Excellent 55 Nessa :)

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  4. anthonynorthFri Mar 19, 05:23:00 AM EDT

    Now this one is really intriguing with a marvellous last line.

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  5. Brian MillerFri Mar 19, 06:05:00 AM EDT

    scary picture...might not be quite what he is looking for...counst be "beast"ly...teehee. fun 55!

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  6. Peter StoneFri Mar 19, 06:38:00 AM EDT

    Lots to think about there, and the number on the back of that car? Hope he doesn't call that number as the emergency number...

    My 55 is Everything I Lack

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  7. Doug The UnaFri Mar 19, 07:00:00 AM EDT

    If he calls emergency, he's going to have a lot of paperwork to fill out.

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  8. AnonymousFri Mar 19, 07:04:00 AM EDT

    A lot to contemplate on this one ~ nice job Nessa. Intriguing.


    I'm up after a few weeks off:
    Friday Flash 55 ~ Pride

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  9. Hootin AnniFri Mar 19, 08:09:00 AM EDT

    Kinda like those movies...is it Flash Forward? No...can't think of the movie titles where the kid can see deaths of his friends.

    Anyway,........being that I'm babbling again, I'll move on. I really like your 55...always do.

    Here's mine Take Pleasure - 101

    Have a super terrific weekend.

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  10. UnknownFri Mar 19, 08:28:00 AM EDT

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  11. UnknownFri Mar 19, 08:29:00 AM EDT

    WOW... Nessa, this is intense and you change the whole fiction just with your last line!
    Awesome.
    You really should publish your work!

    hugs
    shakira

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  12. JimFri Mar 19, 09:55:00 AM EDT

    He should pinch himself. If he wakes up then he should roll over and go back to sleep.

    If he doesn't wake up then scream. That will wake someone else up to help him.

    And if neither of those work, he should pick up his toys like a good boy and get ready for supper.
    ..
    BTW, that was a 55 word comment for you.
    ..

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  13. secret agent womanFri Mar 19, 10:58:00 AM EDT

    Wonder how 911 would react to a disaster-to-be call?

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  14. Alice AudreyFri Mar 19, 12:23:00 PM EDT

    ESP or inanity? Exactly what number does he have in mind?

    Well done, Nessa!

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  15. BuzzardFri Mar 19, 12:35:00 PM EDT

    The tarmac, a plane crash? 666 would they pick up only those who couldn't be SAVED??

    My 55: My Invisibility

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  16. NessaFri Mar 19, 12:58:00 PM EDT

    Dreams of Perfection: Or all of them together.

    Quilly: ...that let a serial killer live to kill again?

    Thom: Ah, you believe in preordained fate?

    Anthonynorth: A conundrum.

    Brain Miller: You score 100% for being the first to get it.

    Peter Stone: You get a great big A+ too.

    Doug: That could be hell.

    Chef Kar: I hope he thinks carefully.

    Hootin' Anni: i know what you mean and I can't think of the name either. You have a wonderful weekend too. It's Spring!

    Shakira: As soon as I can find someone to publish for me!

    Jim: You have given him lots of choices. Does he get desert?

    Secret Agent Woman: I don't think we should test it.

    Alice: I think we have a 3rd winner.

    Buzzard: And you make the 4th who got it. Yours is a very good question. That would make a good story.

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  17. AnonymousFri Mar 19, 01:25:00 PM EDT

    hmmm. I guess I am too literal to get this story. Ask Quilly. She knows how dense I am. LOL.

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  18. MelliFri Mar 19, 02:21:00 PM EDT

    Reminds me of that show about the guy that got tomorrow's news today... what to do? what to do?

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  19. julianaFri Mar 19, 02:26:00 PM EDT

    something diabolic about this one... great food for thought

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  20. Maude LynnFri Mar 19, 02:29:00 PM EDT

    Freaky!

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  21. Monkey ManFri Mar 19, 03:40:00 PM EDT

    Assuming this was "photo inspired" I love it. Sign of the beast always stimulates the imagination. Thanks for stopping by to read my 55 and for your kind words.

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  22. jFri Mar 19, 04:13:00 PM EDT

    This makes me want to know more!

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  23. ~✽Mumsy✽~Fri Mar 19, 04:15:00 PM EDT

    Well done, Nessa..I can imagine the whole scene in front of me.

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  24. AnonymousFri Mar 19, 05:23:00 PM EDT

    loving the micro 55 fiction :)
    well done

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  25. Claudya MartinezFri Mar 19, 05:53:00 PM EDT

    I always feel like I'm on the verge.

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  26. Susan at Stony RiverFri Mar 19, 06:44:00 PM EDT

    What a moment, what a decision.

    My kids are very much into Kung Fu Panda, in which the old turtle remarks that 'a man often meets his destiny on the road he takes to avoid it'. Your story reminded me of that -- lots of food for thought!

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  27. NessaFri Mar 19, 06:47:00 PM EDT

    Gigihawaii: You are not dense. It is pretty vague.

    Melli: Yeah. One of those philosphical things.

    Juliana: Diabolic is exactly right. Another winner.

    Mama Zen: I agree.

    Monkey Man: Not the number you would normally dial in an emergency. Another champion of awareness.

    Jennifer: In this case, you might not.

    Mumsy: Thanks.

    Michelle: Thank-you.

    Unknown Mami: I hope you have strong toes.

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  28. NessaFri Mar 19, 06:49:00 PM EDT

    Susan: I like that. I will remember that. Very wise turtle, as they tend to be.

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  29. Yvonne OsborneFri Mar 19, 08:36:00 PM EDT

    Hmmm. A little tricky, this is. Photo leads one to believe it's a car crash but tarmac means plane. Very good. 666 indeed.
    Good job!

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  30. Amanda MooreFri Mar 19, 08:42:00 PM EDT

    very cool love a good blood bath! But you need that mysterious Dun Dun Dun music at the end!

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  31. Stan SkiFri Mar 19, 08:44:00 PM EDT

    Just like my first driving lesson!

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  32. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallFri Mar 19, 10:02:00 PM EDT

    you got me hooked,
    movie clip alike...
    cool 55.

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  33. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallFri Mar 19, 10:03:00 PM EDT

    http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/03/19/55-how-do-you-relax-during-weekends/

    mine is kind of dry,
    a new hand,
    Thank you for looking at it!
    Happy Friday!
    You rock!

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  34. masterymisteryFri Mar 19, 10:09:00 PM EDT

    how does that old saying go? Ze who dials the number of the beast trials the slumber of the East, or something...

    really enjoy the way your graphics/photos/visuals always work so well and so tightly with your words...

    masterymistery at cosmic rapture

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  35. Together We SaveFri Mar 19, 10:48:00 PM EDT

    Love it!! As always!!

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  36. Shelley MunroSat Mar 20, 01:51:00 AM EDT

    This one is intriguing. It raises all sorts of questions.

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  37. Ronda LaveenSat Mar 20, 02:54:00 AM EDT

    What was psychic about this for me was, I witnessed a little rear-ender on the way to work this morning.

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  38. AnonymousSat Mar 20, 04:41:00 AM EDT

    Clever indeed! A thriller in 55 words?

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  39. NessaSat Mar 20, 07:38:00 AM EDT

    Yvonne: Tarmac can refer to any paved road although it wouldn't surprise me if the devil threw a plane in there somewhere.

    Moorebloglife: I wish I had thought of that.

    Stan Ski: Oh, no. I hope not. ;)

    Ji: Thanks. I'm glad you joined the fun.

    Masterymistery: I have to look for that saying. It's quite good. And thank-you.

    Together We Save: I'm glad you enjoyed.

    Shelley Munro: Because we all need more questions. = )

    Ronda Laveen: Mine was on the way home.

    Stine in Ontario: Only if you were thrilled.

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  40. PattiKenSat Mar 20, 04:41:00 PM EDT

    A dilemma for sure. Is he a psychic? Or a schizophrenic? Does he need a physician? Or a psychiatrist? It's a conundrum.

    My 55 is up here.

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  41. NessaSun Mar 21, 08:40:00 AM EDT

    PattiKen: Keen awareness and madness are closely related.

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  42. PattiKenSun Mar 21, 10:02:00 AM EDT

    They are? oh oh...

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  43. Lulda CasadagaMon Mar 22, 08:57:00 AM EDT

    Well, in my CPR classes I tell the students to at least call 911 if you see an emergency but can't help! :D
    Interesting 55! :)

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